Sunday, October 21, 2012

Original sin ..as in what a web she weaves..

...today I am visiting the imaginary garden with real toads imaginay gardenwithrealtoads


My first time here on this leisurely Sunday, trying my hand at another form of poetry, the quatrain in couplets and rhyme, made up of 4 lines with 5 or 7 word stanzas.  My, I feel like I'm back in school again..relearning things.  I start with this photo taken yesterday in my back yard by the side of my house...





Wet with dew in the morning time
bearing radiant afterglow stirred from deep within
 nature's crocheted doily quivers in borrowed sun
when touched in act of deadly sin


Engineer of eight legged kind
designs with hunger in mind
victims captured without a fight
satiated sleep at evening's twilight 


by klr



25 comments:

  1. Wow, beautiful... looks like strings of pearls..

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  2. wow, such lovely jewels you've captured. it reminds me of winter, and for me that's a good thing because I love that season. the poem is the perfect accompaniment. happy week to you kkkkaty.

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  3. Beautiful writing especially coupled with this picture--really lovely

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  4. You've captured such a rare and beautiful picture. In your backyard? My goodness, it's a paradise so near. We often wonder of the instincts that drive these 'engineers' on how to secure food! Great write Kathy!

    Hank

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  5. excellent poetic description of your lovely picture! i wish i can write like this...

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  6. Wonderful!!! This, "quivers in borrowed sun..." and this, "Engineer of eight legged kind/designs with hunger in mind," love these...great work!

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  7. You have captured the scene wonderfully !!!

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  8. An interesting metaphor, well executed. I also like the borrowed sun line, and the hints of erotica or perhaps just human weakness in deadly sin, and satiated sleep of willing, or at least submissive, victims.

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  9. Thank you, Hedge...as you see I emulated your example of form..not such a mongrel beast at all ;_)

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  10. These are two solid rhymed stanzas, which capture the industry of the spider very well.

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  11. "Engineer of eight legged kind
    designs with hunger in mind"

    O, what a fine observation of industry!
    (Thank you again for commenting on my blog, too.)

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  12. Well, this image is STUNNING and the words... well, I think YOU could teach the class. :)

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  13. and isn't it a masterpiece of engineering...i love cobwebs..i'm in awe of their fragility and stability and when they're hung with dew...it's just magic...smiles...loved this...

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  14. I'm trying to find the photo of a stained glass looking one...thanks!

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  15. Beautiful photo and you did so well with your poem. It hurts my brain to think about doing this. Lol.

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  16. the webs are so cool to see...how they intricately weave these its a wonderful bit of art...nice pic to go with it as well...def a bit of natures magic...

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  17. I love this one, and so perfect for the photograph.

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