Thursday, March 14, 2013

Random cinquains...



  I      Chess                                                                                      III    Snow

         Bishops                                                                                           I kick                                  
         and knights protect                                                                           snow high because
         the King's crown from capture                                                         I am mad at the world
         sacrifice many noblemen                                                                   better ease my anger thusly 
         Check mate                                                                                      Rage gone                         
                                                                                             

         

  II    Caravan                                                                                       IV    Bees
         
         Gypsies                                                                                            Purple
         dance in firelight                                                                                honey made by
         bandannas wave the air                                                                       bees that suck blackberries
         circling feet stomp to sweet music                                                       for us to find in honeycomb
         Tango                                                                                               Humming



V   Justice

Fairness
truth and honor
                                                                     integrity not lost                                                                   
unless one can afford O. J.'s 
lawyer

Today we are being asked by Tony at            dversepoets.com    to write cinquains, the form of five lines of words with syllable counts of  2, 4,  6. 8. and 2...always fun to do..and for me, much easier than limericks as I am  unfortunately not clever enough for them..;)

38 comments:

  1. wow..very nice collection...love the bees and blackberries and dang the justice one...my fav is the chess cinquain...very cool...oh and the gypsies..nice... i like them all much...

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  2. A lovely selection from blackberries to snow - kept my mind moving.

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  3. haha ca afford OJs lawyer....funny....and hey better to kick snow and get it out than other things...right....smiles...a cool blend of mood in these....

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  4. Love number two. Maybe one day I'll get to dance with Gypsies.

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  5. All very effective. Bees and Gypsies are my two favorites. I am dancing with the gypsies!

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  6. Ha, I empathize with kicking snow. Time for it to go, go, go!

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  7. Love the tango... it would work well with this week's prompt at Poetry Jam, too.

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  8. Love the chess one and the way you managed to get these in a circle. Little gems

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  9. Great poems, all little sketches here. And even OJ's lawyer couldn't keep him out of the joint this time. Loved these.

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  10. Love your offering ~

    I am kicking along with you on that snow (like Mary) ~ I also like that tango with the gypsies ~

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  11. You're quite good at these. I like them all.

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  12. love these - especially the gypsies and the bees - both equally sweet! K

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  13. ...aww... loved 'em all...but my fave was chess, snow & bees... fantastic Katy... you are too inspired... smiles...

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  14. "Chess" is perfect. Yes, I always feel for the horse :)

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  15. These were good, although I think "Justice" was my favorite.

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  16. I like your cinquains. They are all commentaries about society and life. :-)

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  17. Wow... you made this look so effortless and easy! I love them all.

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  18. The first one is my favorite :-)

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  19. A great collection...justice was the fav here.

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  20. What a collection. All are exquisite, so I refrain from giving a favorite.

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  21. These are fine cinquains - I enjoyed them all. A few things for you to consider;

    1) In chess it is the king that the pieces are protecting. As Henry VIII of England amply demonstrated, even queens are disposable. Changing queen's to king's has no effect on the syllable count, so I'd definitely make that change if it were my poem.

    2) In Gypsies I think repeating the title as the first word detracts from the lovely image you paint. There are two possible solutions; either a different title or - and I think this is what I'd do - have the poem run straight on from the title like this:

    Gypsies
    dance in firelight ...

    3) Honey is made by bees, not from them!! I know what I said about in a perfect world every line ending has significant, but the world isn't perfect.

    Just some suggestions for to you to do with as you will :-)

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    1. I actually thought the same thing about the gypsies when re-reading them...my grandson always beat me at chess..it's no wonder ;)...you are correct about the last one ...thanks, Tony, for your help and advice..it is very welcome at any time.

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  22. Lovely collection Katy - especially love the bees!

    Anna :o]

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  23. These are all wonderful, Katy, but I love the last one!

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  24. I like the gypsy cinquain so much. A vivid picture of pure delight.

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  25. Awesome collection Katy~I laughed about the one on justice. Great last two lines. Very impressive work :-)

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  26. All very clever, and so different. Well done! K.

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  27. Ohhhhhh, OJ's lawyer -- cracked me up.
    Very politically uncorrect!!
    naughty

    Wow, a woman who plays chess -- I almost fall in love. But can I convince you of the superiority and sexiness of WeiQi?
    (in my table on contents, under "Subject" you will find WeiQi poems)

    Blueberries and dancing gypsies -- fun!

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  28. I'm glad you enjoyed them, Sabio, and I did read about WeiQi poems. I was unfamiliar with it, don't even know how to play Majong yet (my grandchildren will show me), but I'll readily submit to your idea of the superiority and sexiness of the the game as I interpret it. ;)

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  29. Then you do understand. It is a magical game == the only one I have found to imitate life. Perhaps Life imitates WeiQi. !

    (in seriousness, it is Yuan which makes the inanimate come to life, and the living realize they are alive)

    see more of Yuan by clicking here

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    1. I do understand this, and your mantra...given that, I think I personally fail to reach the full potential that is offered and would like to change that.

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  30. http://yuanfields.wordpress.com/2012/09/04/yuan/

    Iinks show poorly here. there is one above these words.

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  31. These are all good.I like the purple honey best:)

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  32. Well KkkkKaty! my first time here and enjoyed looking round... this was the work that really caught my eye - very creative & interesting. A sparkly pleasure to read... With Best Wishes Scott www.scotthastie.com

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  33. Why thank you..I enjoyed reading some of your recent poetry as well..I find it full of truths and fine sentiments..

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