Wednesday, April 24, 2013

Not enough rain..


There once was a time for sloughing
what we had was gone
dampened by infidelity
You said I did nothing wrong

No rain fell there to rinse away
aching arteries
barricaded by loves locked chains
heart and soul still cindery

There was not enough rain to wash
away fallout left
letting particles cling about
irretrievably bereft

Along came the rain to erase
old ways of feeling -
refreshing downpour, detailing, 
waxing, waning, then healing

Now hovering on my shoulders,
a white cloud holding
no rain, for the heart, mind and soul
together are enthroning





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37 comments:

  1. oy what a feeling...you did nothing wrong...that sucks because its takes away anything you could have done to change it and you feel powerless...my fav part...aching arteries
    barricaded by loves locked chains...that whole stanza has some cool ABC stuff going on...

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  2. I love the title and that first stanza just punched me in the heart. Well-written heartache.

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  3. heart and soul still cindery

    mmm love that line..

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  4. I just visited a neighboring blog that sang her poem...which was really song lyrics. Somehow, your words made me want to hear this sung as well in a heartbreaking blues kind of way. Beautiful.

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    1. my voice would not be the best to sing it, but I think you are right.thanks.;)

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  5. This gives me such a somber feeling.

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  6. Cet effet avec la pluie et superbe, belle compo, j'adore !

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  7. I love this, especially as the spirit begins its inevitable rise, that I so admire in life.......the image is SO COOL!!!!!!!!

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    1. Thank you...it took a long time for it to rise...thanks, Sherry.

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  8. nice imagery... almost like the pouring rain is what you're fighting
    and you hold no power to stop it... love that use of nature.. really set the poem's tone.

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  9. Katy, this has a nice rhythm and outstanding imagery.

    Pamela

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  10. love the rain in its different roles here...to cleanse, refresh and heal...an emotional write that really tucks at the heartstrings

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  11. A lovely and elegant message of healing.

    Beautiful.

    Lady Nyo

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  12. This is truly so beautiful, Katy!
    I love the way you've looked at rain here.

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  13. Beautiful Katy ~ I love the metaphorical meaning of the rain ~ Also, the words are more compact and carefully chosen ~

    And kudos to making the font bigger and bolder, it is now very easy to read ~

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    1. Thanks Grace - I'm still having trouble with the template, though, in that I've tried unsuccessfully to change the color of the fonts in the footer links..it's as if they are 'set'. I appreciate your help.

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  14. I agree with other comments: the rain is powerful imagery here, for healing that has to take place.

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  15. Lots of feeling in your poem here, Katy. So glad that the font of your poem is bigger. My 'older' eyes need all the help they can get.

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  16. A very beautiful poem, well made. I reread it several times for the pleasure of it.

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  17. The whole world can look cleaner after the rain, all debris washed away, it's a very strong metaphor for healing on the inside. Very nice!

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  18. There is something about the word 'bereft' that is deeply moving, sadder than sad.

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  19. Very interesting, unusual and creative word use in this, that takes it our of the ordinary. I especially like the beginning and the end.

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  20. I felt tears well up. The rain tastes of salt yet after the rain, even the most tender gain strength. This is beautiful.

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  21. i am completely in love with the first stanza - beautifully sad poem

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  22. Katy- thank you so much for stopping by my blog with your comment (on Tuesday's Muse) This poem is makes me take a deep breath, it holds loss so gently. xo teri

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  23. I liked the use of rain....with each line I was wondering if the rain would finally wash away the wrong.

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  24. great shot and edit! I am partial to rain shots - good job!

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  25. Your poetry comes from deep within your soul and is very moving. A wonderful photo to go with this piece.

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  26. Very poignant rain - hard to feel rinsed through. Thanks. k.

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