Saturday, May 4, 2013

Medieval tale..?





   She bakes a wild salmon souffle' 

   to astound her distinguished peer -
   guest of all guests:  King Zabineer 

   Troubadours serenade all day,

   dancers Petra and Electra
   portray their best kama sutra

   Standing on their heads, little sway
   blood rushes to their fair faces
   while they stare at the King's laces

   Serving the meal was her valet

   wearing tights and plume d' egret 
 - mixed greens with an oil Vinaigrette 

   Crackers, caviar on the way,
 

   fresh raised snails munch on their own terms;  
   lest we forget compost with worms

   Festivities well underway

   locally grown cherries did flirt
   with almonds in a crepe dessert

   And to the hostess's dismay,
   the king made away with Petra
   madame's face:  quite the fenestra



Trying my hand at a form I picked up on one of our blogger's posts called The Constanza, which consists of five or more 3-line stanzas.  Each line has a set meter of eight syllables. The first lines of all the stanzas can be read successively as a poem.  The first lines convey a theme written in monorhyme, while the second and third lines of each stanza rhyme together. Rhyme scheme:   a/b/b, a/c/c, a/d/d, a/e/e, a/f/f………etc.  Those in the know please feel free to correct me if I'm wrong about this. dversepoets.com
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28 comments:

  1. ha...love the dance in your words...and the dessert sounds wonderful...i laughed at looking at the kings laces as well...lol fun piece...

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  2. The rhyme and rhythm in this structure perfectly complements the humor you've unearthed in this tapestry of stories. Well done!

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  3. Im no expert, but it appears to me you nailed the form, and did so quite beautifully. Rythm and rhyme are exceptional! I LIKE it!

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  4. A constanza - I'll have to remember that. Really interesting. Nice movement with lightness to it. Servers wearing tights and plume d'egret. Well, alright then.

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    1. Thank you..a bit risque perhaps; I surprise myself

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  5. nice. a new form to mull over to boot. Really nice tone here and lost of neat use of action, detail and levity as well. Nicely done. thanks

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  6. haha...cool on the .. locally grown cherries flirting
    with almonds in a crepe dessert......smiles...really like where the prompt took you

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  7. You have done a beautiful job not just with the form and rhyme but in creating an amazing atmosphere this is wonderful =)

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    1. Thank you ..actually the form is easy..the atmosphere a challenge ;)

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  8. Have never heard of this form... there are so many out there...but love the quick pace of this...and really loved this stanza...
    Festivities well underway
    locally grown cherries did flirt
    with almonds in a crepe dessert

    local girls always like to flirt lovely light write!

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  9. ...consistent diction --- loved it! the form itself & your tale fits good together and are completely fascinating... smiles... enjoyed it!

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  10. A lovely form and a delicious meal.. love it.

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  11. Very lovely form and rhyming pattern~

    I specially like this - delicious :

    Festivities well underway
    locally grown cherries did flirt
    with almonds in a crepe dessert

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  12. I'm enjoying the european smorgasbord. clever turns and , though the form is new to me, you've done splendidly with the flow of words. kama sutra, headstands--fantastic visuals.

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    1. I'm glad you stopped by..thanks, Jane.

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  13. the above comment was me, Katy. I've been unable to post from wordpress and am trying to figure it out. ~Jane

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  14. I like your write. It was fun to read!

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  15. Super clever - lots of flavor here - I am most intrigued by the Kama Sutra on the head! Crazy, but much fun! k.

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  16. Wonderful! both the form and content!

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