Thursday, February 13, 2014

Poet Dulot's rhyming challenge...

drivesidenightliedwagesavedmadefacenursechurch,worsepurse
backthat.



Bouts-rimés (boo reeMAY) is French for “rhymed ends”. It is the name given to a poetic game of the mid 17th century in which a list of words that rhyme with one another is given to one or more poets who then make their own poems, all of which use the same rhyming words in the order in which they were given at the end of their lines.   Tony at  dversepoets.com  has us writing these today and the words given are above...


Lovely evening to go for a drive
Bowing, he opens the door on her side
His motive this fine February night,
to tell her his secret, why he had lied
about the strange work he did for his wage
For seven long years he had scrimped and saved
Time to honor the commitment he made
What would be the surprised look on her face
After the accident she was his nurse
Today he is taking her to the church
He will marry her for better or worse
In his pocket a ring in a small purse
First saw her beauty from flat on his back
From poor to rich he did quite well at that





26 comments:

  1. Nice to see one where the "lied" is turned into something good. Love this!

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  2. I really enjoyed this, Katy. The meter is smooth, you've used the rhymes in a natural way - each one is the right word in the right place - and I love the appropriateness of the romance on Valentine's eve ... smiles

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  3. awww...what a cool story you wove...working in secret to be able to afford the ring...
    i would say that lie is a good thing...i am a sucker for the romantic....smiles.

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  4. A lovely story and a beautiful looking page you have.

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  5. Perhaps a war story - a farewell to arms came to mind - how concisely you slid it into the required words. Well done!

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    1. thanks....I had that in mind..it wrote itself..

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  6. I also thought of Farewell to Arms, or the Notebook. Neat story!

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    1. my thoughts exactly when I saw the words

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  7. Oh Katy - this is beautiful, it flows perfectly. You are an amazing writer who I now follow (don't know why I hadn't before - sorry).

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  8. Wonderful Katy ! You have nailed the iambic pentameter.. Enjoyed this one immensely.

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  9. Sweet.. and the flow is terrific.. so smooth. So very well done!

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  10. oh that is very cool when through something like an accident or sickness you find the love of your life... very cool storytelling....

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  11. Awww... how sweet. Love what you did with the crambo words. Happy Valentine's Day!

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  12. This flows well and the sentiment is wonderfully sweet. Reminds me of A Farewell to Arms, except with a happy ending!

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  13. you managed to get the nurse in your tale. I couldn't and had to cheat a little.

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  14. Lovely words Katy - a happy ending is bound to come.
    Anna :o]

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  15. This is lovely and the words fit perfectly..a nice valentine's day poem..

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  16. I love how this ended, beautiful write.

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  17. This so enchanting to read on Valentine... love the end.. you have fused a wonderful story of the words..

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  18. Nice. A beautiful story. Sweet and lovely.
    -HA

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  19. Love this sweet story...and on Valentine's Day too...so well told.

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  20. you have curious as to the secret...and if the riches he has at the end is monetary or simply due to her in his life. a very nice piece.

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  21. Beautiful and heard warming poetry here - I feel spirited.

    Very nice use of the Rhymes too - but the story takes over.

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