Thursday, September 24, 2015

Japanese death poem..




















From seed to blossom,
bathe in one's place in the sun,
to the sea and timeless sands 
Orion awaits, 
the plight of twenty one grams


A Tanka to express my version of a death poem, suggested to us by Gayle and Grace and over at dversepoets.com







23 comments:

  1. Taking the ocean to this form of poetry--quite lovely.

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  2. I really like the infusion of 21 grams. How very clever.. And with that Orion brightens,

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  3. Ah.. the Soul of Stars
    immeasurable
    imagination
    of human
    eYes..:)

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  4. You included so much; very impressive, reminding us that our little lives are but a blink in the vast schematic of things; reminds us to live joyfully in the Now,, walk your beach, talk to your moon, feed your crows. Smile.

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  5. I did not know what the significance of twenty one grams was, so I googled it. (What on earth did we do before Google?) Thanks for making me look something up that I found it quite interesting to learn. But even before I looked up this significance of twenty one grams, I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. Peace, Linda

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  6. That's a lifetime, from seed to blossom ~ I also love Orion awaiting Kathy ~

    Thanks for a lovely jisei ~

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  7. The circle of life is so grand that we move from the earth, to the oceans and then onward to the heavens. Your tanka is so encompassing and I love that ending line. Thank you for joining in, Kathy.

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  8. I do wish I understood 21 grams...(explain?)....but the other lines do resonate clearly!

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    1. Mary, Sherry explains the theory below;)

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  9. I gather upon dying, a person weighs 21 grams less than when alive, a figure generally postulated to be the weight of the soul????? anyway, very original and intriguing, this poem. Thought-provoking too.

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  10. I too had to check out the 21 grammes allusion - the so-called weight of the soul - but of course immeasurable...
    Well, you certainly had all of us intrigued!
    Interesting too, how much sea/ocean/beach imagery these death poems are invoking.

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  11. From seed to blossom is such a great way of looking at life. And Orion as the beacon of hope. Lovely!

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  12. Incredible. So original this is! One has to wonder if it is the soul that weighs 21 grams and hence the body weighing less when the soul departs....so many thoughts in this one. I like Orion awaits.....don't know if you know this: the Japanese word for the Milky Way is amanogawa - River of Heaven or Celestial river.

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  13. love the sky and sea reference - and sharing the 21 grams

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  14. This is a bit different, and thought-provoking. I am fond of Orion and like that inclusion. :)

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  15. quite lovely Kathy!...and a thankyou (shoutout) to Sherry Marr for helping me to understand the enigmatic final two words!

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  16. ha - had to check out the 21 grams as well - i like how you connect it to the sea and timesless sands...

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