Friday, June 17, 2016

End of the Affair...





















I could not say goodbye
to my lover
"Hasta la vista baby" was my mantra
Ties broken, desire receded
into the bleakest bleak oblivion

No longer arrive sweet spicy letters;
there is no 'keeping in touch',
yet lingers the smell of
heady cigar smoke
Out flame! Out spark!
Forget the number I wrote
on the menu 
in a French restaurant

My heart sprang free today
I'm dancing across the moon now 
with a mad Sicilian
Forgive my callousness,
my dear....but oh, 
by the way, 
how is Vivienne?










10 comments:

  1. Perhaps a good time to cut ties too and start over again. I enjoyed the voice of the scorned and unhappy woman Katy.

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  2. I enjoyed the sarcasm & scorn heaped on the old lover, & yes, trimeter, & others perhaps got me all iambicked up. Thanks for the lovely comment on my Nam poem. (I was in the service in the late 60's, but never was in country--just had lots of friends who were--& the poet's ear captured it all).

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  3. The alternation of meter in this really adds to the tone of the poem with emphasis focused on the trimetric lines. I felt a bit of resentment tinged with sarcasm here. Great poem.

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  4. When all else fails, dance with reckless abandon (or Sicilians). There is much mood conveyed rather well and vehemently here, Kathy!

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  5. "Out flame! Out spark!" -- I love that this feels like both a mantra, and perhaps a plea.

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  6. Maybe the mad Sicilian turns out much better anyway... love the voice of this. It's hard to admit it hurts isn't it

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  7. Yes, like Bjorn I loved the voice here. The Sicilian sounds like a better option!

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  8. Gorgeous alternation of meter in your poem, Kathy :D

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  9. Ah, smiling I am! I must admit, cannot comment on the meter (just mixes me up) but I love the flow of this and the voice at the end! :) Well done!

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  10. The mix of meters works well. Gives this poem a bit of a jagged feel, which seems appropriate when talking about an ex lover

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