tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post5529735664012304050..comments2023-11-03T04:24:05.324-07:00Comments on A Dwelling by The Sea: Raymond Carver - ErasuredKathy Reedhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-74241761235210735982012-11-30T15:58:54.923-08:002012-11-30T15:58:54.923-08:00I like Carver's work, and had to read both a f...I like Carver's work, and had to read both a few times in order to decide which message and meaning I preferred. Lots of fun, this exercise.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12460881702249079009noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-32703673799755466752012-11-30T11:34:08.660-08:002012-11-30T11:34:08.660-08:00...yes, exactly..glad you enjoyed it.....yes, exactly..glad you enjoyed it..Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-70926233699674883822012-11-30T10:38:08.807-08:002012-11-30T10:38:08.807-08:00Enjoyed how line breaks alone can create a new poe...Enjoyed how line breaks alone can create a new poetic feeling. Makes me want to visit his work.Victoriahttp://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-71413404506820944072012-11-30T09:41:40.176-08:002012-11-30T09:41:40.176-08:00...a poem pulled out of another's poem is not ......a poem pulled out of another's poem is not my cup of tea, but I have learned something as a result ;)Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-46762391798245329412012-11-30T09:39:58.652-08:002012-11-30T09:39:58.652-08:00...if this helps us hone our own "style"......if this helps us hone our own "style" than that is a good thing..thanks..Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-70410282999826378132012-11-30T09:38:43.822-08:002012-11-30T09:38:43.822-08:00I'm glad you enjoy reading him, too..A Small G...I'm glad you enjoy reading him, too..A Small Good Thing is like so many others..you think the predictable, but there's a catch...Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-72678648048291085542012-11-30T09:35:50.519-08:002012-11-30T09:35:50.519-08:00"implored me for the changes".....true o..."implored me for the changes".....true observation! Thanks..Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-88365848957267064302012-11-30T09:34:28.326-08:002012-11-30T09:34:28.326-08:00yes, her words to the horses..and the sedan pullin...yes, her words to the horses..and the sedan pulling out were to components I intentionally left out..Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-58499956616669615932012-11-30T09:32:24.460-08:002012-11-30T09:32:24.460-08:00Thanks, Mary..Thanks, Mary..Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-44873956084554372282012-11-30T09:32:04.121-08:002012-11-30T09:32:04.121-08:00..yes, and I'm curious about Lish's omissi.....yes, and I'm curious about Lish's omissions as well ;)Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-51724394321176529042012-11-30T09:28:04.635-08:002012-11-30T09:28:04.635-08:00..yes, and thanks....yes, and thanks..Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-78325056705719598422012-11-30T09:27:38.767-08:002012-11-30T09:27:38.767-08:00...the word strikes a note, doesn't it? Thank......the word strikes a note, doesn't it? Thanks.Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-74939668721332426082012-11-30T09:26:26.369-08:002012-11-30T09:26:26.369-08:00..horses have special meaning to me also ;_)..horses have special meaning to me also ;_)Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-33252180822024836472012-11-30T09:25:40.419-08:002012-11-30T09:25:40.419-08:00Thanks, Laurie..Thanks, Laurie..Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-55562819918274103252012-11-30T08:43:11.025-08:002012-11-30T08:43:11.025-08:00Glad you put up what was being erased as I can'...Glad you put up what was being erased as I can't make sense of the process when I just see a poem that some one says was their version of x. Here you can see how you 'carved' out of Carver a different poemJohn (@bookdreamer)https://www.blogger.com/profile/11576434749272275190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-65680773243264740812012-11-29T23:14:14.684-08:002012-11-29T23:14:14.684-08:00very interesting...i like his style and also what ...very interesting...i like his style and also what you've done with the words...i agree with what you say about learning something about the own writing while doing this erasure exercise...that was a very interesting experience for me as well...Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-36409443465042001632012-11-29T22:06:17.247-08:002012-11-29T22:06:17.247-08:00I just love Raymond Carver. I feel that you'v...I just love Raymond Carver. I feel that you've rather distilled him--not easy as he is very distilled - and added more rhythm. Very interesting. He's such a good writer. I share your admiration. I think my favorite story is a A Small Good Thing - maybe have the title wrong. k. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-44485523203606845352012-11-29T21:09:33.810-08:002012-11-29T21:09:33.810-08:00Very interesting indeed. Concur with some of the o...Very interesting indeed. Concur with some of the other comments. The choice must have appealed to you, and implored you for the changes you made as though you could answer (as you have in a way) the unanswered questions in his. I think I like yours the better.Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-711638522228419032012-11-29T20:09:43.225-08:002012-11-29T20:09:43.225-08:00Yes, very atmospheric and your version changes the...Yes, very atmospheric and your version changes the horses quite a bit. It was eerie and emotionally tense, really nicely done. Thanks for joining us and I felt the same way initially but then embraced what I could learn in the process.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17392858163745232319noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-35984998032304154622012-11-29T19:24:01.527-08:002012-11-29T19:24:01.527-08:00Wow, an amazing poem you created from an amazing p...Wow, an amazing poem you created from an amazing poem.Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-61383845486837688862012-11-29T19:23:40.587-08:002012-11-29T19:23:40.587-08:00Interesting contrast, and an intriguing pick for s...Interesting contrast, and an intriguing pick for source material. Raymond Carver's editor, Gordon Lish, was famed for taking the original material, slashing and burning and turning it into the concise voice that we all take for granted is Carver's. It would be interesting to contrast the original, Lish's version (if they exist) and your own!Semaphorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16945917520773585129noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-1570900788783805502012-11-29T18:49:26.086-08:002012-11-29T18:49:26.086-08:00Well done--sad and eerie, like a bad dream.Well done--sad and eerie, like a bad dream.Jeffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10858791213787473858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-67139595090337858822012-11-29T18:12:58.372-08:002012-11-29T18:12:58.372-08:00A Malediction...yikes.
Very deep. Intriguing. Rath...A Malediction...yikes.<br />Very deep. Intriguing. Rather sad. I really enjoyed both the original and yours. Daydreamertoohttp://daydreamertoo.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-64909125946527720572012-11-29T18:11:41.644-08:002012-11-29T18:11:41.644-08:00Interesting feel about horses -- my wife rides -- ...Interesting feel about horses -- my wife rides -- so I can feel a little for these critters. Thanx.Sabio Lantzhttp://yuanfields.wordpress.com/2012/11/29/future-irony/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-57556122730230412482012-11-29T18:08:26.830-08:002012-11-29T18:08:26.830-08:00well i think both are great...maybe a compliment t...well i think both are great...maybe a compliment then that i confused his for yours...smiles.Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.com