tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post6640630052635171289..comments2023-11-03T04:24:05.324-07:00Comments on A Dwelling by The Sea: Tinker, tenor, carpenter...Kathy Reedhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-73955361882674717912013-05-14T12:26:23.175-07:002013-05-14T12:26:23.175-07:00Thank you..always good to hear such words ;)Thank you..always good to hear such words ;)Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-10125369278149772102013-05-13T19:13:36.334-07:002013-05-13T19:13:36.334-07:00"I'm a multi-hued heavy knit sweater
Wa..."I'm a multi-hued heavy knit sweater<br /> Warming life's wheels, changing plugins..trappings<br /> with attitude of a reaching tenor"<br /><br />Katy, this is wonderful! love these descriptive lines, such beauty here... excellent work!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-86430646426261683662013-05-11T09:51:20.855-07:002013-05-11T09:51:20.855-07:00Loved the 'multi-hued heavy knit sweater' ...Loved the 'multi-hued heavy knit sweater' for to survive this is what some of us need to wear...<br /><br />Love is a strange thing - it can be warm and comforting or leave us cold and alone when the nest is flown.<br /><br />Anna :o]hyperCRYPTICalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11967085628384237933noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-16371106768366772332013-05-11T05:45:47.618-07:002013-05-11T05:45:47.618-07:00A creative, introspective piece, katy--nicely done...A creative, introspective piece, katy--nicely done.vb holmeshttp://vbholmes.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-82235303523974442792013-05-11T03:21:41.755-07:002013-05-11T03:21:41.755-07:00Great images..love the wise words in the end! To l...Great images..love the wise words in the end! To life and to love.ayalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243362803799877014noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-39439413333858553632013-05-11T01:50:41.567-07:002013-05-11T01:50:41.567-07:00Hiya katy, like you, I am rather partial to the -i...Hiya katy, like you, I am rather partial to the -ing form of the gerund. It makes for a nice rolling rhythm.Janine Bolléehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09857073674960699155noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-6490465540222483282013-05-10T23:25:58.723-07:002013-05-10T23:25:58.723-07:00Definitely liked the immortal footprints - and the...Definitely liked the immortal footprints - and the deep thoughts at the end - a soft melancholic memento moribrudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-12064467370933791732013-05-10T22:55:50.437-07:002013-05-10T22:55:50.437-07:00def. build more spring rests...for me there's ...def. build more spring rests...for me there's so much hope in doing this..even in the face of fall rain you know...love the images...multi-hued heavy knit sweater...so good..Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-84729052339119396032013-05-10T20:47:57.438-07:002013-05-10T20:47:57.438-07:00Some great introspection throughout...looking back...Some great introspection throughout...looking back...condensing meaning into 'love.'...needing "strength to meet affairs of the day."...We can all identify with that. JayGhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15817675980200134668noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-63395405363149956852013-05-10T19:01:35.648-07:002013-05-10T19:01:35.648-07:00That last stanza could be a poem on its own, it ho...That last stanza could be a poem on its own, it holds the truth of what we can hope for...I enjoyed your Terza Rima, it had a quick, almost rap beat with some very creative lines... nice work!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-9583212788684283712013-05-10T17:03:28.889-07:002013-05-10T17:03:28.889-07:00I especially liked that line as well : )I especially liked that line as well : )Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09589253190731511955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-49960638600047303472013-05-10T15:43:31.392-07:002013-05-10T15:43:31.392-07:00Thank you Grace..I changed 'cleanse' to me...Thank you Grace..I changed 'cleanse' to mend to appease Tony's mention of rhyming but maybe should have left it the way it was? Will stop by later.Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-21683074624280748002013-05-10T15:42:21.307-07:002013-05-10T15:42:21.307-07:00Points well taken, Tony; I changed 3 different lin...Points well taken, Tony; I changed 3 different lines for better rhyming, the iambic illudes me. I know I ran over the 4 tercets..didn't have the will power to abbreviate the thought..thank you very much! Will be by later to read yoursKathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-33410660384157987642013-05-10T15:38:27.620-07:002013-05-10T15:38:27.620-07:00Thank you Mary..I will be stopping by later this e...Thank you Mary..I will be stopping by later this evening..Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-23520831101665753582013-05-10T14:40:22.517-07:002013-05-10T14:40:22.517-07:00I specially like this part: let salt of the ocean...I specially like this part: let salt of the ocean the spirit cleanse ~<br /><br />I would like to believe that after all is said and done, in the end, we find love's true prize ~<br /><br />Good to see you Katy ~Scarlethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03330793338813508704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-24318649416896440252013-05-10T14:28:28.381-07:002013-05-10T14:28:28.381-07:00There are some lovely rhymes here; although hammer...There are some lovely rhymes here; although hammerings isn't really a rhyme for tapping/trapping ... in a feminine rhyme like this the rhymed sound is the main vowel, in this case 'a'or 'app'.<br /><br />You have pentameter going right through the poem. It's not always iambic, but it's pretty rare for anyone to write purely iambic pentameter poems these days; I'm sure I don't in my sonnets.<br /><br />Strictly speaking, as you have not written a terza rima sonnet (4 tercets and a couplet), you should have finished with fgfg as your closing rhyme scheme, rather than the couplet you have. That said, form is not a strait-jacket; it is a guide and should be adapted to suit the needs of the poem and the purposes of the poet ... or at least that's what I believe.<br /><br />However, all that aside, what you have here is a very effective poem - and that is the object of the exercise ... smiles. Thanks for joining in at dVerse today.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-60579412642670477992013-05-10T14:24:53.952-07:002013-05-10T14:24:53.952-07:00I like "I'm a multi-hued heavy knit sweat...I like "I'm a multi-hued heavy knit sweater warming life's wheels." That expresses so much about your role. I am trying to decide for myself if the ending is optimistic or pessimistic. We do give all we have to life for sure, even though we eventually lose our life. But yes, there is a prize at the end as well..we hope. You really worked this form well, Katy. A poem with meaning, with message. Deep.Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-88086570670729890572013-05-10T13:50:42.386-07:002013-05-10T13:50:42.386-07:00wow,,thanks for all three comments Brian..smiles.....wow,,thanks for all three comments Brian..smiles..I'll be back later for reading time for sure.. I will change the "needing" Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7245293878341271115.post-71066287129827653182013-05-10T13:43:50.207-07:002013-05-10T13:43:50.207-07:00nice...like the wisdom in the close...and pretty c...nice...like the wisdom in the close...and pretty cool terza rima...i will leave the form critic to tony but i like the opening stanza, would probably start the second with 'i need' instead of needing to make it a bit more personal earlier on...i like the tinker tapping too...smiles.Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.com