Thursday, March 24, 2016

Awakening - a Quatrain Refrain

Awakening ~

Vistas from snowy mountain tops
seek balance with greening valleys
She emerges blitheful from sleep

Undercurrent powers shifted,
winds blow, new life set free to grow
Edges swell, winter's palm lifted 

Unstable avalanches steep,
changing vistas from mountain tops

Today at we are writing quatrain refrains:
A quatrain refrain comprises eight lines:  two tercets and a couplet, eight syllables per line or iambic tetrameter, your choice, first line is a refrain, repeated as the last (some variation acceptable).
Rhyme-scheme: A-b-b
A = refrain line. c/c refers to line five having internal rhyme which is different to the a- and b-rhymes. The midline rhyme does not have to fall exactly in the middle of the line


  1. I wish for winter's palm to be lifted now, smiles ~

    I am looking forward to the new season ~

    Thanks for joining us and Happy Easter !!!

  2. I like how Mother Nature readies herself for the next season many changes. Nicely done!

  3. Oh! this is absolutely sublime work here :D

  4. this smells of apple and pear blossoms...the deft tangle of warm and cool breezes over the landscape of lime greenery aware(s)...

  5. Love it when green emerges from beneath the snow!

  6. Beautiful imagist poem - your half rhymes work and give this poem added texture. Well crafted and beautifully realized. Thank you Kathy.

  7. I enjoyed this, Kathy. I like how you used slant rhyme and the slight change in the refrain lines.

  8. A lovely piece, right in line with so many of us who seem obsessed with the emergence of Spring. Your slant/half rhymes, & adjusted refrain impress me. I did not have the incentive nor courage to try either.

  9. Beautiful, Kathy. The form suits this subject nicely!

  10. I can feel the longing for spring in this!

  11. You make the changing of the seasons sound like the sacred event is truly is. Wonderful work.

  12. Love love love the sibilant sounds in this:
    "Unstable avalanches steep"

  13. A beautiful example of Spring as a transition, growing and evolving.

  14. You bring that mountain to life with the avalanche of your final couplet. That would indeed change the vista from the mountain top!

  15. SpRing PreSents
    SNowY dRifts..
    PleasAnt dreAms


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