Thursday, March 24, 2016

Awakening - a Quatrain Refrain










Awakening ~

Vistas from snowy mountain tops
seek balance with greening valleys
She emerges blitheful from sleep

 Undercurrent powers shifted,
winds blow, new life set free to grow
Edges swell, winter's palm lifted 

 Unstable avalanches steep,
changing vistas from mountain tops






dVerse
Today at dversepoets.com we are writing quatrain refrains:
A quatrain refrain comprises eight lines:  two tercets and a couplet, eight syllables per line or iambic tetrameter, your choice, first line is a refrain, repeated as the last (some variation acceptable).
Rhyme-scheme: A-b-b
                            a-c/c-a
                            b-A
A = refrain line. c/c refers to line five having internal rhyme which is different to the a- and b-rhymes. The midline rhyme does not have to fall exactly in the middle of the line


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16 comments:

  1. GraceMarch 24, 2016 at 6:31 PM

    I wish for winter's palm to be lifted now, smiles ~

    I am looking forward to the new season ~

    Thanks for joining us and Happy Easter !!!

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  2. BodhiroseMarch 24, 2016 at 6:56 PM

    I like how Mother Nature readies herself for the next season ahead...so many changes. Nicely done!

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  3. Sanaa RizviMarch 24, 2016 at 7:03 PM

    Oh! this is absolutely sublime work here :D

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  4. EdwardMarch 24, 2016 at 7:19 PM

    this smells of apple and pear blossoms...the deft tangle of warm and cool breezes over the landscape of lime greenery aware(s)...

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  5. MaryMarch 24, 2016 at 8:12 PM

    Love it when green emerges from beneath the snow!

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  6. BeachannyMarch 24, 2016 at 8:16 PM

    Beautiful imagist poem - your half rhymes work and give this poem added texture. Well crafted and beautifully realized. Thank you Kathy.

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  7. VictoriaMarch 24, 2016 at 9:01 PM

    I enjoyed this, Kathy. I like how you used slant rhyme and the slight change in the refrain lines.

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  8. Glenn ButtkusMarch 25, 2016 at 7:14 AM

    A lovely piece, right in line with so many of us who seem obsessed with the emergence of Spring. Your slant/half rhymes, & adjusted refrain impress me. I did not have the incentive nor courage to try either.

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  9. Walter J. WojtanikMarch 25, 2016 at 1:30 PM

    Beautiful, Kathy. The form suits this subject nicely!

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  10. AnonymousMarch 25, 2016 at 5:58 PM

    I can feel the longing for spring in this!

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  11. The BizzaMarch 25, 2016 at 8:44 PM

    You make the changing of the seasons sound like the sacred event is truly is. Wonderful work.

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  12. De JacksonMarch 25, 2016 at 10:36 PM

    Love love love the sibilant sounds in this:
    "Unstable avalanches steep"

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  13. AnonymousMarch 26, 2016 at 9:53 PM

    A beautiful example of Spring as a transition, growing and evolving.

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  14. UnknownMarch 28, 2016 at 5:36 AM

    You bring that mountain to life with the avalanche of your final couplet. That would indeed change the vista from the mountain top!

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  15. Katie Mia FrederickApril 12, 2016 at 9:45 PM

    SpRing PreSents
    SNowY dRifts..
    PleasAnt dreAms
    MEadoWGrEEn..:)

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