Friday, April 3, 2015

Mad Moon Rising...



                                                                                                                         














Good luck to those writing daily for NaMoWriMo !  


The Villanelle is the subject of today's poetry assignment, should we decide to attempt it. With this, the pattern of the villanelle can be illustrated as as A1bA2 – abA1 – abA2 – abA1 – abA2 – abA1A2 where “a” and “b” are the two rhymes, The two refrains (“A1” and “A2”) and two repeating rhymes (“a” and “b”). The first and third line of the opening tercet are repeated alternately as the refrains, until the last stanza, which includes both refrains.   dversepoets.com
dVerse






Dawn wakes as impressionistic art
tribulations fade with night's long shadows
The day amends the mad moon's reckoning

A white cheddar moon bleeds red tears tonight
Pain looks anew out the leaded window
Dawn wakes as impressionistic art

Escape the wrath of the mad moon's red light
What dust was left of the stars lies below
The day amends the mad moon's reckoning


Love's face in glowing embers joins the night'
hope turns to new madness he's come to know
Dawn awakens as impressionistic art

Chasing the mad moon rising out of sight,
his chest breathes out true love of long ago
The day amends the mad moon's reckoning

The heart no longer wants to fight the fight
Wind in the trees mimics her whispers low
Dawn awakes as impressionistic art
The day amends the mad moon's reckoning











7 comments:

  1. I like the refrain:

    Dawn awakes as impressionistic art
    The day amends the mad moon's reckoning

    Looking at dawn colors is my favorite thing to see once I wake up ~ Chase that mad moon & wake up to a warmer day ~

    Thanks for participating K ~ Wishing you Happy Easter ~

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  2. this poem held me in it's grip!

    i love the title and the fantastic poem measures up completely!

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  3. I especially like the final refrain, as it wends through the pen ~

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  4. The final quatrain is especially haunting and lyrical, very melodic.
    I was just wondering if you meant 'come to know' rather than 'came' in the line:
    'hope turns to new madness he's came to know'
    Other than that, you weave a gorgeous dreamscape...
    Happy Easter!

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  5. "The heart no longer wants to fight the fight"---this line speaks volumes, but the whole thing really is so captivating and even the repetition of the villanelle does not feel repetitive because of the magical quality you've created here. Excellent villanelle.

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  6. "A white cheddar moon bleeds red tears tonight"

    Are you effing kidding me? Holy shnikes! That is a KILLER line! I loved the vividness of your description. It was like reading a visual artistic medium, if that's possible.

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