Friday, April 3, 2015

Mad Moon Rising...



                                                                                                                         













Good luck to those writing daily for NaMoWriMo !  


 The Villanelle is the subject of today's poetry assignment, should we decide to attempt it. With this, the pattern of the villanelle can be illustrated as as A1bA2 – abA1 – abA2 – abA1 – abA2 – abA1A2 where “a” and “b” are the two rhymes, The two refrains (“A1” and “A2”) and two repeating rhymes (“a” and “b”). The first and third line of the opening tercet are repeated alternately as the refrains, until the last stanza, which includes both refrains.   dversepoets.com
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Dawn wakes as impressionistic art
tribulations fade with night's long shadows
The day amends the mad moon's reckoning

 A white cheddar moon bleeds red tears tonight
Pain looks anew out the leaded window
Dawn wakes as impressionistic art

 Escape the wrath of the mad moon's red light
What dust was left of the stars lies below
The day amends the mad moon's reckoning
Love's face in glowing embers joins the night'
hope turns to new madness he's come to know
Dawn awakens as impressionistic art

 Chasing the mad moon rising out of sight,
his chest breathes out true love of long ago
The day amends the mad moon's reckoning

 The heart no longer wants to fight the fight
Wind in the trees mimics her whispers low
Dawn awakes as impressionistic art
The day amends the mad moon's reckoning









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7 comments:

  1. GraceApril 3, 2015 at 2:26 PM

    I like the refrain:

    Dawn awakes as impressionistic art
    The day amends the mad moon's reckoning

    Looking at dawn colors is my favorite thing to see once I wake up ~ Chase that mad moon & wake up to a warmer day ~

    Thanks for participating K ~ Wishing you Happy Easter ~

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  2. Stacy M.S.April 3, 2015 at 3:20 PM

    this poem held me in it's grip!

    i love the title and the fantastic poem measures up completely!

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  3. grapelingApril 3, 2015 at 5:02 PM

    I especially like the final refrain, as it wends through the pen ~

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  4. AnonymousApril 3, 2015 at 11:56 PM

    WOW WOW WOW

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  5. Marina SofiaApril 4, 2015 at 12:55 AM

    The final quatrain is especially haunting and lyrical, very melodic.
    I was just wondering if you meant 'come to know' rather than 'came' in the line:
    'hope turns to new madness he's came to know'
    Other than that, you weave a gorgeous dreamscape...
    Happy Easter!

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  6. C.C.April 4, 2015 at 10:34 AM

    "The heart no longer wants to fight the fight"---this line speaks volumes, but the whole thing really is so captivating and even the repetition of the villanelle does not feel repetitive because of the magical quality you've created here. Excellent villanelle.

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  7. The BizzaApril 10, 2015 at 11:48 PM

    "A white cheddar moon bleeds red tears tonight"

    Are you effing kidding me? Holy shnikes! That is a KILLER line! I loved the vividness of your description. It was like reading a visual artistic medium, if that's possible.

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