Today at dversepoets.com we are asked to write an octet, 8 line stanzas - and included is a challenge to write about a road, journey, or travel or make an 8 by 8 square poem. I could have gone in several directions, but this is what 'came out'.
Twilight's vines reach deep inside me
the sea's mood spectrum leads me home
Smooth wet sand reflects my being
in past summers' patina glow
Sea spray bathes giant rocks till clean,
birthing fresh sand in its foam's flow
Instilled when first learned starfish breathe
- echoing a chorus of ohms
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Bees nurse their new honeycomb
as against a tree trunk I lean
I look out from under its dome
Rain drips languidly from folded leaves
Willow branch fingers reach below
into a perylene green stream
Into the perfect wave I go,
for I can imagine heaven
- now without being sad, I know
Ah yes.. the Ocean is our Love
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the connection of salt water
runs through our veins in
arteries pumping blood as
well as rivers attributing Love
in connection to others in
well of watered love asONe..:)
To be the sea-born and live in harmony of waves... what a wonderful lines. I love the thoughts of walking barefoot in the sand... twilight give such a special light... I get an impression of a Kröyer painting in my head... Like this one:
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His beach scenes are favorite of mine..and his work with portraits are superb! Thank you.
DeleteTo live near or beside the sea would be heaven ~ I specially like the chorus of ohms ~
ReplyDeleteI felt the soothing in these words.... very like the sea.
ReplyDeleteYour rhyme scheme is subtle, the form unobtrusive. I like the first one best, more primordial & cosmically connected. I like the lines /sea spray bathes giant rocks till clean/birthing fresh sand in its foam's flow/.
ReplyDeleteThe ocean does indeed constantly breathe that "ohm". I love the oceans and anytime I have to leave when I have visited, I feel as if I am leaving a beloved person. These are lovely octets and I do so like the rhythm and subtle rhymes. I wish I could read these with my eyes closed so I could hear the ocean.
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Into the perfect wave I go"
Ah! I love that. Beautifully penned.
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I really did like the idea of going into a wave and seeing heaven. What better place to get a beautiful view....
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed this view of nature you gave the reader...
Beautifully written, indeed!
ReplyDeleteI love the first poem, Kathy. It is very evocative and powerful and I enjoyed the meditative quality suggested by the rhythm and closing line.
ReplyDeleteI've only seen the ocean a few times in my life...but each time I've had the chance, I have thoroughly loved it. Lovely set.
ReplyDeleteGood rhythm and flow. Nice theme, too.
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed reading both of these, I enjoyed the flow of the first one
ReplyDeleteand I would depart chanting three ohms..
The whole thing is beautiful, but that first line is just stunning and really grabs me!
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