Rhyme scheme: a,a,b,a
Meter: 8,8,8,12 Fourth line requirement of internal (b) rhyme scheme, on syllable 8. Like the outgrowing of a small flower, the forth line of each stanza is longer, and enwraps the previous lines. Line #4 requires an internal rhyme scheme that rhymes the eighth syllable with the end of line #3, and continues to add on four more syllables than the other lines so that the fourth line ends rhyming with lines #1 and #2. Mr. Toad |
I did not see you there at first
In your language, I'm not well-versed
You blended in with the wood chips
so uncannily, my parched lips cried out in thirst
We stared each other down awhile;
In shadows, I'm quite sure you smiled
Fell away pieces of my heart
I then began to fall apart, in the erstwhile
Fear evaporated like rain
You listened closely to my pain
as I wept, needing to confide,
and lay in my bed on my side to hide in vain
Moonshine fell on the ebbing tide
You led me in hope to abide
small waves pulled away at the neap
You said the time to leap is when dissatisfied,
Who knows from where some ropes are thrown;
you helped me see beyond the stone
wall where I was squarely grannied,
stripped of all camouflage, harried and quite alone
Courage now springs from fertile soil
where strange mushrooms grew through turmoil
You took me from the moat beneath,
my soul to a safe castle keep, my friend loyal
What a perfect florette, Kathy!
ReplyDeleteBeautifully done! :D
ReplyDeleteWe can find much comfort in nature...even through a smiling toad. Beautifully written Florette, Kathy. Thanks so much for joining in.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Gayle.
Deletei suppose.. if our
ReplyDeleteancestors come
back now to view
our modern ways..
the most surprising
part of us to them..
will be we stand
out from
Nature.. Oh!
so! different!
than the home
they know.. then..:)
Well this is a very delightful read Kathy ~ Glad to read about your loyal friend, smiles ~
ReplyDeleteYou ain't afraid of no florette; super job with the form, & what you had with it; still smiling.
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it.
DeleteThis was wonderful to read, I think you really let that florette bloom.
ReplyDeletePerfect form in a delightful poem. I love toads. So glad you introduced us!
ReplyDeletePerfect form in a delightful poem. I love toads. So glad you introduced us!
ReplyDeleteI cannot understand those who are repelled by toads... they are wonderful creatures.. You manage to capture all the toad can learn the vain humanity in your florette... brilliant work Kathy
ReplyDeleteThank you, Bjorn.
DeleteI thought this was going to be boastful, rash Mr. Toad from Wind in the Willows - but in the end it's a patient, understanding friend. An interesting use of slant rhymes for your 3rd and 4th line (internal rhyme) - very clever!
ReplyDeleteThank you Marina.
DeleteI do like frogs and toads and love their mouths in a perpetual smile. Great florette and wonderful message on this. Mr. Toad is indeed a wonderful friend!
ReplyDeleteThank you Toni.
DeleteAdorable picture and your lines were perfect, just perfect.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much.
DeleteVery well done! Love talking to frogs!
ReplyDeleteThat's quite a talented toad! Lovely and intriguing florette. Peace, Linda
ReplyDeleteYou took me from the moat beneath,
ReplyDeletemy soul to a safe castle keep, my friend loyal
Great ending Kathy! One can never thank enough what good folks can accord be it loved ones or otherwise!
Hank
Thank you Hank.
DeleteThis was wonderfully done. I think that my understanding of the poem was greatly enhanced by the wonderful picture that you posted too!
ReplyDeleteThank you,
Deletethe time to leap is when dissatisfied... nice wisdom in this.. def. there's a need to act when dissatisfied
ReplyDeleteand sometimes it just takes someone to listen and say the right words at the right time
So true.thank you, Claudia
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