Monday, January 18, 2016

Snowflakes














dVerse
From Bjorn today over at  dversepoets.com is a challenge to write a quadrille. There are two stipulations: that the word dance be used as a verb with an object, and to be written in exactly
44 words. Well I was up for a challenge.



Wearing her pink felt hat
among leafy bract,
under yellowing sky -
she arcs her arm, waving at passersby
Perfect lace creations fall, dance around,
become her veil and wedding gown
Bending to converse with another lower bloom,
she discovers in deep snow the groom

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13 comments:

  1. De JacksonJanuary 18, 2016 at 8:51 PM

    I love the thought that snowflakes are "perfect lace creations" falling. Just.so.gorgeous.

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  2. kaykualaJanuary 18, 2016 at 9:36 PM

    The groom had better show himself in more uncertain terms. He may create unnecessary pressure starting out!

    Hank

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  3. brudbergJanuary 19, 2016 at 12:42 AM

    To me finding your groom in the snow has a sinister feeling... an end of sorts, a metaphor for passing... but that's only me... the words are exquisite...

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  4. Katie Mia FrederickJanuary 19, 2016 at 1:06 AM

    Dancing WiNter sNow Love..
    hidden heArts of Frozen
    lore.. wedding
    dress of
    home
    alone..
    hope iS more
    than cold snow
    hands.. wish of
    three.. one of
    Love.. sNow
    sMiles back
    hAnds
    cOld
    now..
    wArm heARt bRings
    relief of Cold.. FroZen
    spiRit grows.. wedding home..:)

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  5. Glenn ButtkusJanuary 19, 2016 at 3:41 AM

    I do so wonder what sort of late blooming blossom she might be? An exquisite poem; love every line, beat & word of it. You were up for it indeed. Sort of reminds me of the snow flower prompt Toni had for us recently.

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  6. lillianthehomepoet.wordpress.comJanuary 19, 2016 at 4:57 AM

    I love the idea of lacy snowflakes becoming the veil and gown for the last flowers blooming.........beautifully done!

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  7. GraceJanuary 19, 2016 at 5:17 AM

    A different and unique take Kathy ~ The ending took me by surprise but I love this imagery:

    Perfect lace creations fall, dance around,
    become her veil and wedding gown

    Thanks for joining us at the pub ~

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  8. WaltermarksJanuary 19, 2016 at 5:28 AM

    OK,i've got to know, what kind of flower is she? Sounds like a late Winter bloom, but i'm not sure. You have woven a great mystery here, so metaphoric!

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  9. MaryJanuary 19, 2016 at 7:17 AM

    Well, the ending was quite unexpected!

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  10. BodhiroseJanuary 19, 2016 at 8:02 PM

    What a wonderful personification of a bloom waving and bending and finding her groom in the snow...I love it.

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  11. UnknownJanuary 22, 2016 at 8:53 PM

    I get the impression of a little girl playing at growing up. Love this.

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