Tony has suggested we write a longer version of the form Cinquain. Thus, instead of 5 lines with the syllable count of 2, 4, 6, 8, 2, we have 5 lines with a count of 3, 5, 7, 9, 3 ...an option for a name for this form? Venseptine or vinseptain Today at dversepoets.com
Curious
of ancient crossroads
places I'll not live to see
Instead brought to me in books, TV
mind travel
Who will be
future presidents?
Will there be peace, no hunger?
I wish to know my great grandchildren
It matters
Important
in grand scheme of things
What intelligence would take
away the best of everything?
It's unfair!
oh, it does matter....i dont like to think about the future we are leaving for our kids....its rather heartbreaking...and i hope we dont continue down the path we are on...the world of books has opened up so much for me as well...
ReplyDeleteI hope to leave only gentle footprints that those coming after can follow.
ReplyDeleteWe can never know what happens beyond our life really...we can only hope.
ReplyDeleteTo think of what the world turns out to be after us is tinged with a melancholy. It matters to know if things would go right for the humanity.
ReplyDeleteWondering and thoughtful write. :-)
-HA
I hope I only leave behind small, barely there footprints. footprints that some future tracker will say, tiny feet but I think it was a nice person. A very thoughtful use of this form. I am looking at what I have written now and wish I could be this good. :-)
ReplyDeleteThe most I can hope for are foot prints in my loved ones' hearts and minds. I think your series here is beautiful. I esp love "I wish to know my great grandchildren It matters"
ReplyDeleteThree perfect takes on the Maude Cinquain; You used the new form, but still wrote effective poetics, posing questions, projections, fears, & some regrets. You made it look easy. I had to work my can off on my three.
ReplyDeletesome strong life things here... thanks for sharing what matters
ReplyDeleteI like to learn about places in books or via TV too but I still hope to visit some of them.
ReplyDeleteWondering about our great-grandchildren should give us a vision for future beyond ourselves...thank you for this!
ReplyDeletea nice look into the future...a sense of hope, but also of longing.
ReplyDeletenicely worded - I wish I felt the future was brighter - I suppose since the dawn of time the future belongs to those who fight for it.
ReplyDeleteA very different feel to these modified cinquains - not the lyricism of some of the other offerings, nor the jaunty aphorisms of others, this is more engaged and natural rhetoric. Isn't it great, how versatile this form is proving to be?
ReplyDeleteLove this version of a cinquain... more syllables more flexibility more emphasis :) You've got some really interesting thoughts in that trio a poems... sometimes I ponder about these unanswered questions too...
ReplyDeleteWell done.
ReplyDelete"Unfair" only if we expect some intelligent actor. If not, fairness does not enter the picture, and we can perhaps rest more easily.
I share the curiosity and the closing sentiments.
ReplyDeleteLovely, and thought-provoking. :)
ReplyDeleteOnly with imagination will we have the power to extend good time for generations here on earth. Well expressed.
ReplyDeletephilosophy in five lines ...succinct and to the point each one...thankyou
ReplyDeletebooks… mean comfort to me. Yes, you really do tackle some big issues in these short little poems.
ReplyDeleteThoughtful take Kathy! Yes, what is it going to be. The future mystifies!
ReplyDeleteHank
What intelligence lies in our destiny dear Katie I do not know. But we must progress - but I fear we won't.
ReplyDeleteWe are the sum of our parts...
Anna :o]
i would love to take a look into future as you can into another world by reading a book... see.... someone HAS to invent this time travel machine... smiles
ReplyDeleteIt would be nice to meet the grandchildren, smiles ~ I wonder if we would be wiser if we know the future ~ Have a good day K ~
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