Friday, June 9, 2017

Periwinkle skies















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Victoria has asked us to write using the Lai form of poetry today, a nine line stanza or verse with the short 5 or 2 syllable lines. I expanded it to several more lines.
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Sayer,
With my hazel eyes
I see the sunrise

 layers,
and I theorize
the Universe' size.

 Sailors'
silken moons arise;
I romanticize,

 players
immortalized in
periwinkle skies

 Prayers, 
stories of our lives, 
hopes, dreams realized

 Paler
stars found, a surprise
novas rhapsodize

 Nature
mourns, decries the why's
of lost butterflies
















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19 comments:

  1. lillianthehomepoet.wordpress.comJune 9, 2017 at 5:12 AM

    "Nature
    mourns, decries the why's
    of lost butterflies"
    LOVE LOVE LOVE!

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    1. Kathy ReedJune 9, 2017 at 5:31 AM

      Thank you...I don't know where that came from??;)

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  2. Sumana RoyJune 9, 2017 at 5:19 AM

    I like how you played with the form and how the poem ends with a sad note.

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  3. JillyJune 9, 2017 at 5:19 AM

    Immortalized players - wonderful image! This is simply beautiful, Kathy - Poem on!

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  4. NosaintJune 9, 2017 at 5:59 AM

    Novas rhapsodize! Gorgeous.

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  5. CharleyJune 9, 2017 at 6:59 AM

    Well painted!

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  6. colorfulpenJune 9, 2017 at 7:41 AM

    Beautiful imagery.

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  7. indybevJune 9, 2017 at 10:10 AM

    Upside down lais! So clever, and making me want to try. Great word pictures.

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  8. AnonymousJune 9, 2017 at 11:35 AM

    I love how you flipped the form - so clever and so beautifully done. This one is exquisite!

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  9. VictoriaJune 9, 2017 at 12:28 PM

    Kathy, this is just stunning. Like the other Victoria, I love the upside down use of the form--very effective for this poem. That last stanza got to me. Life is so fragile.

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  10. Jane DoughertyJune 9, 2017 at 1:19 PM

    There is a lot of energy in this poem with its vibrant images!

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  11. Frank HubenyJune 9, 2017 at 3:00 PM

    I especially liked the last stanza with the lost butterflies.

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  12. Glenn ButtkusJune 9, 2017 at 3:56 PM

    Is flipping the form another version of the form? Clever either way. Lovely word-smithing. You had me at /periwinkle skies/

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  13. ImeldaJune 9, 2017 at 7:18 PM

    Lovely write about the mysteries of nature. Love the last lines especially. 😊

    -imelda

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  14. brudbergJune 10, 2017 at 9:04 AM

    Actually I think I love the flipped version better... I just hope we can save the butterflies.

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  15. GraceJune 10, 2017 at 4:27 PM

    The ending part is so sad with the lost butterflies ~

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  16. Jeren NazutoJune 11, 2017 at 12:00 AM

    Beautiful and delightful!

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