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A familiar spotlight
beams down on me
passing ancient stars still aglow
Gravity tugs between the colossal hunter
stepping across the night sky
and my heart
If I sing from a mountain plateau,
build stairs for me to climb
I'll bring you armfuls of wildflowers
...play for you a honeyed cello
where safely therein his belt, you swing
on a middle star..
...and tell you revelations
of a changed world and time
Intercepted streams
of consciousness meet...bent vinyl time
softens, memories boomerang
from a favorite LP
Ah, your savior-faire, my naivete..
a favorite red gown,
spumy champagne
Still, you are the high road
I drive by the sea...
you're there beside me at the symphony,
and when I dine you are the
soupe du jour,
So once again won't you lead me
waltzing blissfully,
this time across the dance floor
of the stratosphere...
of a changed world and time
Intercepted streams
of consciousness meet...bent vinyl time
softens, memories boomerang
from a favorite LP
Ah, your savior-faire, my naivete..
a favorite red gown,
spumy champagne
Still, you are the high road
I drive by the sea...
you're there beside me at the symphony,
and when I dine you are the
soupe du jour,
So once again won't you lead me
waltzing blissfully,
this time across the dance floor
of the stratosphere...
I hear you with this, Katy! I have all my old LP's,never play them, but I love the memories I still have of the 'changed world and time.'
ReplyDeletebig smiles...i love the waltzing together there in the end...this comes to really soft and romantic closure...and i love old vinyl...i love the pops and cracks and find them a bit romantic as well...my fav part...
ReplyDeletebent vinyl time
softens...memories boomerang
from a favorite LP
Ah, your savior-faire, my naivete..
and this is the one time you will hear me say this, but lose the ... between softens and memories..., make it a comma because it gives you a double play with softens....of time softens and softens memories..and that is cool...smiles.
point well taken..thanks, Brian! your advice the other day helped to relax a little..I'll change that right now ;)
DeleteThis is an absolute delight, Katy. I love the memories and the mood.
ReplyDeleteThe second stanza is really dreamy... memory filled and poignant . Particularly enjoyed
ReplyDeleteyou're there beside me at the symphony,
and when I dine you are the
soupe du jour,
Very imaginative.
I want to climb those stairs and gather wildflowers in the star field. Your imagery is so unique and romantic. I'm an amateur astronomer so your poem grabbed my attention right away. The progression is fabulous. I really enjoyed your poem.
ReplyDeletelove all the images and how you capture their charm...my fav is...when I dine you are the
ReplyDeletesoupe du jour... this is just so to the point... just lately my daughter had to do some research for school and suddenly she asked: mom, can you tell me what LP stands for..? i was so shocked in a way but yeah..how should she know...smiles
ha..she's young..it's amazing how much has changed in the last oh..25 years..thanks claudia..
DeleteThere is nothing like listening to old LP's, Katy. What delightful read.
ReplyDeletePamela
I loved the figments of imaginations employed in this poem ... beautiful !!!
ReplyDeleteAh, the night sky and nostalgic sounds...loved the imagery.
ReplyDeleteLike the thought of the trapeze artist coming down from the stars in this lovely verse.
ReplyDeleteI'm hoping though that 'armfuls of wildflowers' will forever remain a metaphor and not become reality :-)
..thanks..hope you got that my mate was swinging on a star in Orion's belt..where I imagined him to be since he passed..and if we were to connect..etc?
DeleteOrion stands out so strong -- what, with Betelgeuse and Rigel, he is always the easiest to spot.
ReplyDeleteAnd Alnilam is the blue super giant in the middle of his belt (the string of pearls), becomes the LP, champagne and the stratospheric dance floor.
Very trippy -- a galactic journey.
That constellation has special meaning for me, so glad you picked that up and I know the names of the stars..just wasn't sure if I should use them in this poem...might have been a good idea ;)
DeleteOh the soup du jour... an old LPs .. and I never play them, not my CDs either. But it brought back back a lot of memories
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderfully nostalgic. Very nice, Katy!
ReplyDeleteThis sure brought back memories ~ My best parts are:
ReplyDeleteAh, your savior-faire, my naivete..
a favorite red gown,
spumy champagne
Still, you are the high road
I drive by the sea...
I like that you are using the commas, instead of ......; perhaps you can even try dashes -- for pauses, if you like. The punctuation is a tricky business but after a while, you get the hang of it and notice it too in other's works ~ Hope you don't mind the feedback ~ Smiles ~
Not at all; I know I've overused the ....'s
DeleteThanks, Grace.
I can just see you know, dancing across the galaxies ;-)
ReplyDeleteIntercepted streams
ReplyDeleteof consciousness meet...bent vinyl time
softens, memories boomerang
from a favorite LP
Had seen this bad experience when an LP was left in the car in the hot sun. It bent. Someone mocked and said 'why not turn it around and put it back again. That might get it to regain the original shape!' Hilarious! Thanks for the memories Kathy!
Hank
I have them too, all the old LPs and love the memories they bring back...a great bit of nostalgia in your lines.
ReplyDeleteLovely spirtual romance! Thanks for that.... With Best Wishes Scott www.scotthastie.com
ReplyDeletea little John Denver for us today...
ReplyDeletea little John Denver for us today...
ReplyDeletetogether again. this is incredibly lovely. I so enjoyed the journey you took me on, especially noting the effectiveness of your french interspersed and the constellations. wonderful poetry.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully penned.
ReplyDeleteLovely and nostalgic !
ReplyDeleteaahh...I am bliss-ing out on the ethereal dreaminess of your celestial poem, proper fabulous !!
ReplyDeleteI kept my record player well into the CD age haha I used to listen to a lot of Stevie Nicks, vinyl sets a very unique atmosphere love it =)
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