I Chess III Snow
Bishops I kick
and knights protect snow high because
the King's crown from capture I am mad at the world
sacrifice many noblemen better ease my anger thusly
Check mate Rage gone
II Caravan IV Bees
Gypsies Purple
dance in firelight honey made by
bandannas wave the air bees that suck blackberries
circling feet stomp to sweet music for us to find in honeycomb
Tango Humming
V Justice
Fairness
truth and honor
integrity not lost
unless one can afford O. J.'s
lawyer
Today we are being asked by Tony at 
dversepoets.com to write cinquains, the form of five lines of words with syllable counts of 2, 4, 6. 8. and 2...always fun to do..and for me, much easier than limericks as I am unfortunately not clever enough for them..;)
dversepoets.com to write cinquains, the form of five lines of words with syllable counts of 2, 4, 6. 8. and 2...always fun to do..and for me, much easier than limericks as I am unfortunately not clever enough for them..;)
wow..very nice collection...love the bees and blackberries and dang the justice one...my fav is the chess cinquain...very cool...oh and the gypsies..nice... i like them all much...
ReplyDeleteA lovely selection from blackberries to snow - kept my mind moving.
ReplyDeletehaha ca afford OJs lawyer....funny....and hey better to kick snow and get it out than other things...right....smiles...a cool blend of mood in these....
ReplyDeleteLove number two. Maybe one day I'll get to dance with Gypsies.
ReplyDeleteAll very effective. Bees and Gypsies are my two favorites. I am dancing with the gypsies!
ReplyDeleteHa, I empathize with kicking snow. Time for it to go, go, go!
ReplyDeleteLove the tango... it would work well with this week's prompt at Poetry Jam, too.
ReplyDeleteLove the chess one and the way you managed to get these in a circle. Little gems
ReplyDeleteGreat poems, all little sketches here. And even OJ's lawyer couldn't keep him out of the joint this time. Loved these.
ReplyDeleteLove your offering ~
ReplyDeleteI am kicking along with you on that snow (like Mary) ~ I also like that tango with the gypsies ~
You're quite good at these. I like them all.
ReplyDeletelove these - especially the gypsies and the bees - both equally sweet! K
ReplyDelete...aww... loved 'em all...but my fave was chess, snow & bees... fantastic Katy... you are too inspired... smiles...
ReplyDelete"Chess" is perfect. Yes, I always feel for the horse :)
ReplyDeleteThese were good, although I think "Justice" was my favorite.
ReplyDeleteI like your cinquains. They are all commentaries about society and life. :-)
ReplyDeleteWow... you made this look so effortless and easy! I love them all.
ReplyDeleteThe first one is my favorite :-)
ReplyDeleteA great collection...justice was the fav here.
ReplyDeleteWhat a collection. All are exquisite, so I refrain from giving a favorite.
ReplyDeleteYou are too kind..
DeleteThese are fine cinquains - I enjoyed them all. A few things for you to consider;
ReplyDelete1) In chess it is the king that the pieces are protecting. As Henry VIII of England amply demonstrated, even queens are disposable. Changing queen's to king's has no effect on the syllable count, so I'd definitely make that change if it were my poem.
2) In Gypsies I think repeating the title as the first word detracts from the lovely image you paint. There are two possible solutions; either a different title or - and I think this is what I'd do - have the poem run straight on from the title like this:
Gypsies
dance in firelight ...
3) Honey is made by bees, not from them!! I know what I said about in a perfect world every line ending has significant, but the world isn't perfect.
Just some suggestions for to you to do with as you will :-)
I actually thought the same thing about the gypsies when re-reading them...my grandson always beat me at chess..it's no wonder ;)...you are correct about the last one ...thanks, Tony, for your help and advice..it is very welcome at any time.
DeleteLovely collection Katy - especially love the bees!
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Wow! A Cinquain smorgasbord!
ReplyDeletesuch movement
ReplyDeleteThese are all wonderful, Katy, but I love the last one!
ReplyDeleteI like the gypsy cinquain so much. A vivid picture of pure delight.
ReplyDeleteAwesome collection Katy~I laughed about the one on justice. Great last two lines. Very impressive work :-)
ReplyDeleteAll very clever, and so different. Well done! K.
ReplyDeleteOhhhhhh, OJ's lawyer -- cracked me up.
ReplyDeleteVery politically uncorrect!!
naughty
Wow, a woman who plays chess -- I almost fall in love. But can I convince you of the superiority and sexiness of WeiQi?
(in my table on contents, under "Subject" you will find WeiQi poems)
Blueberries and dancing gypsies -- fun!
I'm glad you enjoyed them, Sabio, and I did read about WeiQi poems. I was unfamiliar with it, don't even know how to play Majong yet (my grandchildren will show me), but I'll readily submit to your idea of the superiority and sexiness of the the game as I interpret it. ;)
ReplyDeleteThen you do understand. It is a magical game == the only one I have found to imitate life. Perhaps Life imitates WeiQi. !
ReplyDelete(in seriousness, it is Yuan which makes the inanimate come to life, and the living realize they are alive)
see more of Yuan by clicking here
I do understand this, and your mantra...given that, I think I personally fail to reach the full potential that is offered and would like to change that.
Deletehttp://yuanfields.wordpress.com/2012/09/04/yuan/
ReplyDeleteIinks show poorly here. there is one above these words.
These are all good.I like the purple honey best:)
ReplyDeleteWell KkkkKaty! my first time here and enjoyed looking round... this was the work that really caught my eye - very creative & interesting. A sparkly pleasure to read... With Best Wishes Scott www.scotthastie.com
ReplyDeleteWhy thank you..I enjoyed reading some of your recent poetry as well..I find it full of truths and fine sentiments..
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