Sijo is composed in three lines, each line having 14-16 syllables,
for a total count of between 44-46 syllables for the entire poem out of Asia.
A Sailor's Dilemma
Unable to hide love or smoke, he sails in the morning to drift
into the colorless sea life pressed within time's dusty pages -
between old and new, to decide if he still feels the same for her
A Pioneer's Tale
Lewis & Clark at mouth of Columbia River
Fearlessly guarded in her Bible, between books Matthew and John
since 1853, for spirited native hearts unbroken
a four leaf clover still wafer thin, picked from a burnished meadow
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A Pink Moon
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A Pioneer's Tale
Fearlessly guarded in her Bible, between books Matthew and John
since 1853, for spirited native hearts unbroken
a four leaf clover still wafer thin, picked from a burnished meadow
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A Pink Moon
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Gathering at cusp of twilight, they honked under their breaths, gaggling
A pink rouge of sun set behind the mountains, their destination
little effort ascending to greet their domain, dark silhouettes
wonderfully done. you first, my fave. of the three, holds the age old question (between love n smoke) i enjoy these images. I esp. love the burnished meadow in your second and your third is beautifully painted with rouge and silhouettes.
ReplyDeleteThank you...I guess I passed the test ;)
Deletewhat a wonderful journey in that first one...to see if he feels the same...gives it nice emotion. last line in the second is killer as well...you did really well with this form...
ReplyDeleteBeautiful...I particularly love the last one, very visual!
ReplyDeleteThanks ;)
DeleteThese are all good and varied.Sijo colour suits you. You should wear it more often:)
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DeleteYou are very productive Katy with 3 sijo poems ~ Your first is my favorite of the 3 ~
ReplyDelete..it seems to be the most commented on ..thanks, Grace.
DeleteI like each of yours, Katy. I agree with Grace, and your first is my favorite too. I hope he is able to reach his decision.
ReplyDeleteAs an ex recreational sailor, the first one drew me in. I am battling within myself to decide if his love of her is the boat or a woman, or maybe just a love of the sea.
ReplyDeleteCould be any or all of the three ;)
DeleteBeautifully crafted Katy! My fav is the last one with all its added mystery! Great!
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Drawn in immediately with each of your sijo. I like how you were confident enough to test yourself in three separate poems, and how you gave thought to the thematic implications.
ReplyDeleteWow, Three that are very unique I don't think I can decide which I like more as they all have a tale within the lines. Each full of mystery.
ReplyDeletei like them all but the first one really moved me..gorgeous images and very emotionally touching
ReplyDeleteI like it when you say that ;)
DeleteI must agree with sentiments above, the first one is a shining star. I like the pink moon also with its imagery.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Bjorn ;O
DeleteThese are all fantastic, though the clover touched me the most.
ReplyDeleteinteresting...it's a true story..my g,g,g grandmother crossed the plains and wrote a diary ..another story.
DeleteWow this is exquisite I might try this form, though I could never write anything as beautiful as this
ReplyDelete...deeply contemplative finding hypothesis on the first one Katy... an affirmation of consistency in this world where everything changes... great write... thanks for sharing... smiles...
ReplyDeletehm..consistency..yes, there is a thread of it..
DeleteA lovely triplet... I especially like the third one, a pink rouge of sun.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Laurie
DeleteKaty,
ReplyDeleteThree such different subjects, but all beautiful...Thinly veiled is a common thread - all are on a journey.
Aren't we all...
yes, and thank you ;)
DeleteLove the feeling of the first one...seeking clarity in the expansiveness and solitude of the open sea.
ReplyDeleteglad you like it ..I love the sea, too.
DeleteThree . . . and so well done. I'm not sure I could pick a favorite. Nope, not gonna. Thank you for your recent visit and kind words.
ReplyDeleteThank YOU for your kind words ;)
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ReplyDeleteloved how we became intimate with the subject and yet had a view of the surroundings
ReplyDeleteI like them all very much, particularly the first.
ReplyDeleteI like this form, your sijo are such good stories, vivid, moving.
ReplyDeleteThey are all interesting and well done - great images - the clover, the geese - and language - - thanks! k.
ReplyDeleteI think you did a wonderful job with all of these. The topics are beautifully described...the feelings and images strong in each one. The second one particularly touched me... However, I did have a hard time reading them through the background image.
ReplyDeleteGayle ~
oh dear, I thought I had fixed that with bolder larger fonts...will change the background probably fairly soon..thanks for the nice comment.
DeleteI love time's dusty pages, and the last one simply went straight to my heart. Have you read "Lessons from the Geese"? a wonderful source of wisdom.You'll find it at http://med.fsu.edu/uploads/files/FacultyDevelopment_LessonsGeese.pdf
ReplyDeleteI have it on my office wall, to remind me how interdependent we are.
So glad you mentioned the dusty pages..i will read the 'lesson from the geese' ..thanks :)
DeleteLoved the imagery of all the three and the verses were so very profound in tht backdrop...loved thepioneer the most for thr breathless wonder it created
ReplyDelete..each sijo were chosen as favorites...thanks so much...
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ReplyDeleteColorless sea? -- I always viewed it as colorful -- albeit monotone at times. The question of feeling the same to a sea that may have once been colorful to him is interesting.
..the color of water depends on what's being reflected...
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