drive, side, night, lied, wage, saved, made, face, nurse, church,worse, purse,
back, that.
Bouts-rimés (boo reeMAY) is French for “rhymed ends”. It is the name given to a poetic game of the mid 17th century in which a list of words that rhyme with one another is given to one or more poets who then make their own poems, all of which use the same rhyming words in the order in which they were given at the end of their lines. Tony at dversepoets.com has us writing these today and the words given are above...
Lovely evening to go for a drive
Bowing, he opens the door on her side
His motive this fine February night,
to tell her his secret, why he had lied
about the strange work he did for his wage
For seven long years he had scrimped and saved
Time to honor the commitment he made
What would be the surprised look on her face
After the accident she was his nurse
Today he is taking her to the church
He will marry her for better or worse
In his pocket a ring in a small purse
First saw her beauty from flat on his back
From poor to rich he did quite well at that
Nice to see one where the "lied" is turned into something good. Love this!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this, Katy. The meter is smooth, you've used the rhymes in a natural way - each one is the right word in the right place - and I love the appropriateness of the romance on Valentine's eve ... smiles
ReplyDeleteawww...what a cool story you wove...working in secret to be able to afford the ring...
ReplyDeletei would say that lie is a good thing...i am a sucker for the romantic....smiles.
A lovely story and a beautiful looking page you have.
ReplyDeleteNice of you to say ;) Thank you
DeletePerhaps a war story - a farewell to arms came to mind - how concisely you slid it into the required words. Well done!
ReplyDeletethanks....I had that in mind..it wrote itself..
DeleteI also thought of Farewell to Arms, or the Notebook. Neat story!
ReplyDeletemy thoughts exactly when I saw the words
Deletea good tale, Katy ~
ReplyDeleteOh Katy - this is beautiful, it flows perfectly. You are an amazing writer who I now follow (don't know why I hadn't before - sorry).
ReplyDeleteWonderful Katy ! You have nailed the iambic pentameter.. Enjoyed this one immensely.
ReplyDeleteSweet.. and the flow is terrific.. so smooth. So very well done!
ReplyDeleteoh that is very cool when through something like an accident or sickness you find the love of your life... very cool storytelling....
ReplyDeleteAwww... how sweet. Love what you did with the crambo words. Happy Valentine's Day!
ReplyDeleteThis flows well and the sentiment is wonderfully sweet. Reminds me of A Farewell to Arms, except with a happy ending!
ReplyDeleteyou managed to get the nurse in your tale. I couldn't and had to cheat a little.
ReplyDeleteLovely words Katy - a happy ending is bound to come.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
This is lovely and the words fit perfectly..a nice valentine's day poem..
ReplyDeleteI love how this ended, beautiful write.
ReplyDeleteThis so enchanting to read on Valentine... love the end.. you have fused a wonderful story of the words..
ReplyDeleteNice story! Peace, Linda
ReplyDeleteNice. A beautiful story. Sweet and lovely.
ReplyDelete-HA
Love this sweet story...and on Valentine's Day too...so well told.
ReplyDeleteyou have curious as to the secret...and if the riches he has at the end is monetary or simply due to her in his life. a very nice piece.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful and heard warming poetry here - I feel spirited.
ReplyDeleteVery nice use of the Rhymes too - but the story takes over.